Hinata pushed back her exhaustion as she ran, no longer leaping through the trees. She had to reach Naruto-kun before that strange red chakra took over him completely. She didnt use her Byakugan. She needed to reserve her chakra for the fight.
Suddenly she burst into a clearing. Around the periphery of the clearing lay four dead ninja. Another unconscious shinobi with spiky white hair lay partially inside the battlefield. To her right stood a silver-haired shinobi with glasses. She could see several tears in his white and purple clothing. On his forehead
Hinata gasped. A forehead protector with a single music note gleamed dangerously in the dappled sunlight. The Hidden Village of Sound. Orochimaru.
And to her left
Naruto-kun! she started to yell, but her voice dwindled down to a whimper. He wasnt the same Naruto-kun she knew. All around him, a fiery wall of red chakra sparked and flickered, almost like an aura. His eyes, instead of the familiar sky-blue, were dilated in an orb of vivid, blazing orange. His pupils were slitted and wild, not pure and calming.
As he turned towards her, she flinched. But as he looked at her, the aura of red seemed to recede, and for a moment, his eyes were no longer orange, but blue.
Hinata?
I will not let you interfere, the Sound shinobi yelled, throwing several kunai at Hinata. Hinata felt frozen. She had heard his voice before
but where? She watched as six kunai whirled her way. She flinched against their impact.
Suddenly, she was knocked off her feet, and an intense aura emanated above her. Hinata looked up. Naruto blocked all six with his own kunai, moving faster than Hinata could follow without her Byakugan.
Hinata, what are you doing here? Naruto grunted, ducking under another kunai. Hinata quickly got to her feet. She wouldnt be a burden any longer.
I-I
she shook her head to stop the usual deep red flush from working its way up her neck and across her cheeks. Im here to help.
The unnatural orange eyes replaced his blue ones. Naruto frowned and snarled, Go away, its too dangerous for you.
Hinata shook her head no. I-I will help you, Naruto-kun. Im not so helpless anymore.
Naruto had no time to respond. The Sound shinobi ran at the two, throwing enough shuriken and kunai to darken the air around him.
Hinata pushed Naruto out of the way and ran forward, drawing her own kunai in both hands. Clinkclinkclinkclinkclink. Hinata blocked all the Sound ninjas projectiles, and formed a seal with her hands. Twenty yards, she mentally calculated.
Byakugan! Her opponents chakra system appeared. Diminishing, but still strong enough to put up a good fight. He was forming a glowing, blue chakra on his hands. Hinata felt her stomach drop. She had felt his chakra somewhere before.
Ten yards. This Sound shinobi had been the one to heal her after Neji-nii-san
It couldnt be, she thought, shaking her thoughts loose. She crouched down, lowering her center of gravity. Five yards.
She had seen his type of attack before. Only it wasnt on the battlefield it was in the Konoha hospital. Tsunade-sama had used this formation of chakra for medical uses, often using it as a scalpel during operations. So he was a medic-nin? Two yards.
Hinata! No! In the back of her mind, she could hear Naruto-kun running to her defense, but she blocked that out for now. She had something to prove to Naruto-kun.
She ducked under both her enemys hands, but the blue chakra grazed her long, black hair. She felt a lock waft down to the ground.
She kicked out at her enemys legs, but he jumped up. She grinned. Perfect.
With her other leg firmly tucked under her, Hinata lashed out upwards, planting her foot firmly in the center of the Sound nins chest. Momentum carried his body up, and through his glasses, his eyes held immense surprise.
Jyuuken! Hinata slammed her open palm into his chest. She felt her chakra enter his body, blocking chakra holes and doing internal damage. Thank you Neji-nii-san, she silently prayed. The Sound ninja coughed up blood, spattering her face. She kicked off his body and leapt a good distance away.
She landed facing away, and she heard as his body collided with the ground with a deep thump. She smiled. That went just as she planned.
Suddenly, pain shot through her body, and she doubled over. She noticed that her precious hoodie was sliced in several places. Blood seeped through, staining her jacket.
The Sound nin must have gotten past her defenses somehow. Cuts from the chakra scalpel began to open and bleed freely. The Sound ninjas chakra. She looked up at the silver-haired shinobi. He was the one who healed me during Chuunin Exam.
She watched as the silver-haired Sound ninja rose, and faced the two genin once more. Who no. What was he? He shouldnt have enough strength or chakra left to even stand, Hinata thought desperately.
Kabuto! Hinata whipped her head around. Naruto was running forward, but he was still too far away to protect her. She would have to protect herself. She tried to stand, but another wave of pain washed through her and she collapsed again.
The Sound shinobi Kabuto threw a spattering of shuriken Narutos way to slow him down. Naruto dodged them all, and continued to advance. Kabuto shrugged and turned back to Hinata.
Kabuto raised an eyebrow. Surprised that Im still standing? I use a jutsu that allows me to regenerate my damaged cells. You have appeared to have blocked some of my chakra holes. I commend you on that. But in a moment, when youre dead, its not going to matter, he sneered at her.
Kabuto, you bastard! Ill never forgive you for this! Naruto was suddenly at Hinatas side.
Gatsuga! Two silver, whirling figures drilled through the air, both crashing directly on top of a surprised Kabuto. Kiba and Akamaru leapt away from the crater in the ground. Hinatas eyes widened. So Kiba and Akamaru had come also?
Narutos red aura dissipated as Kiba and Akamaru approached.
Kiba? Naruto helped Hinata to her feet, catching her when she staggered. She flushed slightly at his touch, and bit back the urge to push her fingers together and look at the ground.
Yeah, do you think that Id let Hinata do all the dirty work? Nice move, though, Hinata, Kiba grinned.
Naruto smiled. Hinata noticed that his calm blue eyes were back. Naruto stepped forward to high-five Kiba and pat Akamaru on the head. He commented on how big Akamaru had gotten in the past year.
Hinata glanced toward the crater, formerly known as Kabuto. She didnt want to see his body. She had seen the kind of damage that Kibas jutsu did to unsuspecting enemies. It wasnt a pretty sight.
Kiba followed her gaze. Kabuto, eh? Wasnt he that one genin from the Chuunin Exams a long time ago?
Yeah, Naruto said, but hes actually Orochimarus subordinate a Sound ninja, and hes a much higher level than he led us to believe.
Im not done with you, yet! The trio and Akamaru whirled around. Kabuto stood at the very edge of the crater, panting heavily, but, unfortunately Hinata trembled alive. Kabutos glasses had broken from Kibas jutsu and lay in a mangled heap at his feet.
Hinata shivered. Kabutos gray eyes turned red at the edges. This was something unnatural. Naruto shuddered, and Akamaru growled. Kiba drew a handful of shuriken and sent them whirling through the tense air at Kabuto.
Kabuto snatched all four shuriken out of the air. And he threw them back.
Without her Byakugan, Hinata couldnt see them they were moving that fast. All four were simply a slight shimmer in the air. She could hear their whining trajectory straight for her and Naruto and Kiba and Akamaru. She felt frozen to the spot.
Suddenly a great buzzing black wall dropped down to block the shuriken. The shuriken dropped to the ground useless. Shino materialized beside them in a dark cloud of Destruction Bugs.
Shino! Kiba and Naruto said simultaneously. Both grinned, glad to see their comrade. Hinata smiled. Shino had chosen to help her and Naruto-kun as well. Shino nodded to her. His way of apologizing.
No more interruptions! Kabuto staggered forward wildly. His eyes were now completely red, instead of just tinged red at the edges.
Byakugan!
Jyujin Bunshin!
Kikaichu no Jutsu!
Tajuu Kage Bunshin no Jutsu!
All four genin and Akamaru faced Kabuto, each at the ready with their own jutsus. Kabutos uneasy gaze passed from each of them. He frowned, calculating the situation. Finally, he stepped back, drawing something from behind his back. Through her Byakugan, Hinata could see that it was a smoke pellet.
This is a very inopportune time, Naruto-kun. Perhaps we will meet again later when your annoying friends arent around, Kabuto smirked, throwing the smoke pellet to the ground. A dark, thick cloud blossomed from the floor.
Bastard! Im not letting you get away! Naruto and his clones ran towards the cloud of smoke. Through the smoke, Hinata could not sense Kabutos chakra only Naruto-kun and his clones. She shook her head as the smoke cleared and let her Byakugan drop. Shino and Kiba dropped their jutsus also. Akamaru transformed back into dog form in a puff of gray smoke. Only Naruto was still looking for Kabuto.
Where is he? Where? Where? his clones echoed as they fanned out, still searching for Kabuto.
Oi, baka! You're a little late! Hes gone, face it, Kiba grinned at Narutos unwillingness to give up. Narutos kage bunshin all disappeared in their own plumes of gray. The real Naruto ran up to Kiba. Who are you calling baka?
Hinata smiled slightly and shook her head. Same old competitive spirit.
Suddenly Naruto froze and smacked his forehead. Damn it! I forgot all about him! Ero-sennin! Ero-Sennin!
Naruto, whats wrong? Shino asked. Naruto was searching frantically now, running around the periphery of the clearing.
Kabuto and those four Sound-nin over there, he pointed at the four dead ninja at the far side of the battle ground, knocked out Ero-Sennin er Jiraiya-sama. And during the battle, I sort of forgot about him.
Kiba rolled his eyes. Hinata formed the seal with her hands, very aware of her own limited chakra supply.
Byakugan! She panned her gaze right and left. Finally she found him. Jiraiya had been the fifth person that she had seen the one with a dwindling chakra system. Naruto-kun! Hes over there! She called, pointing.
Ero-Sennin! Hm? Whats wrong with him? Naruto tipped his head to one side. He clasped Jiraiyas shoulders roughly. E-RO-SE-NNIN! Wake up! He shouted, shaking the legendary San-Nins shoulders roughly.
Kiba and Shino shuffled their feet awkwardly in the background. Hinata blushed, slightly embarrassed for Naruto. Uhm
Naruto-kun? His chakras been nearly depleted. Hes not going to wake up until he restores it
and
uhm.. Hinata petered off, blushing even more.
Kiba stepped in to finish her sentence, And you shaking him isnt helping his condition any! Cmon Naruto, hurry up and lets get him to the nearest village.
Naruto laughed sheepishly, rubbing the back of his neck. He helped Kiba load Jiraiya onto Akamarus back. Akamaru barked, slightly annoyed at his new baggage. Kiba consoled Akamaru, telling him that he would get the poor dog a nice steak if he behaved. Akamaru whined once more, still sulking, but only slightly now. Hinata smiled. Kiba always had a way with Akamaru.
Suddenly a ragged bolt of pain shot through her. She collapsed slightly, gripping her upper arm. A thin layer of red oozed out from under her fingers.
Shino crouched beside her, his brow furrowed.
Its deeper than it looked at first. We should get you to a medic as soon as possible, Hinata.
Hm? Hinata? Whats wrong? Naruto materialized beside Shino. Hinata felt herself blush from her toes to the very top of her hairline. Hinata? Do you have a fever too? What else did Kabuto do to you?
Uhm. Uhm. N-nothing Naruto-kun. I-Ill be fine, she stuttered, attempting to stand up. Another sudden flash of pain sent her stumbling directly into Narutos arms.
He looked at her with wide, blue eyes. She trembled and blushed again, willing the dancing black dots at the edges of her vision to overwhelm her. Please, she prayed, let me faint before I embarrass myself in front of him anymore.
Hinata! Hinata, whats the matter? Naruto shouted at her, turning her over so that she was lying on her back facing up towards him.
Its a combination of blood loss and chakra exhaustion. Weve just come from a mission concerning missing-nin, Shino said. If Im suffering from blood loss, why is all of it going to my cheeks? Hinata irritably thought.
I-Im sorry, Naruto-kun, Hinata let the words tumble from her lips.
Why are you sorry, Hinata? You did great! Naruto beamed at her. Im not a burden anymore! Hinata thought, mentally jumping for joy. Another wave of pain washed over her.
She couldnt remember if she smiled back before the looming blackness overwhelmed her.













Devious Comments
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lol, don't worry...
you haven't heard stupid questions until you meet my sister xD
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Your delusions are my reality...
[Forsaken in the Darkness - A Gaara fanfic]
[Always and Forever - A NaruHina fanfic]
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Naruto: Ero-sennin what did you do to Hinata?
Jiraiya: I just asked her for some inspiration
Hinata: can't sleep............perverts gonna write about me........*twitches*
I'll hurry and finish chap 3 ;D
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Your delusions are my reality...
[Forsaken in the Darkness - A Gaara fanfic]
[Always and Forever – A NaruHina fanfic]
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this is me at home
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The only problem I saw was a very minor tendency to use characters's names repeatedly instead of a synonym, such as using "the blonde ninja" instead of using "Naruto" too often, or "the Hyuuga heiress" for Hinata. When I began writing, I was taught that if you use your characters's names too much, it gets annoying and redundant. So writers need to use synonyms for the characters in place of their names to add variety to the wording, typically phrases that briefly describe them such as "the raven-haired boy", or "the purple-haired kunoichi". However, I was taught that you need to pick only a single descriptive phrase and stick with it for the entire story. So if you refer to Naruto as "the blonde ninja", you have to only refer to him as "Naruto" and "the blonde ninja" and nothing else, unless under very rare circumstances, such as Hinata refering to him as "the object of her affections" when she is focused on in third-person limited narrative.
However, this is only a factor when the names become redundant and repetitive, which did not happen in your story. And sometimes this method does not suit the writer's particular style of writing. So feel free to ignore my suggestion, okay? ^_^
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